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Re: Timothy C. May: Mini-mailbombs and Warning Letters
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> but the key was not there. Please mail me your key. Thank you.
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> If anyone has a constructive suggestion as to how this mail could be
> changed to convey more information or to be less "threatening", please
> mail me.
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Sure, I found the above offensive. It comes across in exactly the same
tone as a cop saying, "Please step away from the car." I know it's silly,
but sometimes Please just isn't enough. The simple change:
but the key was not there. Could you please mail me your key? Thanks.
works miracles:) The tone on the rest of it was nice. You have to be careful
with imperatives. They usually sound mean...even with a please at the front.
Patrick
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